I am happy to help you with your essay. First, let me inform you that the issue task has been removed from teh GMAT in favor of the integrated reasoning section. However, you seem to have your topics mislabled - the one you have labeled issue is actually the argument task. In light of this I am giving you feedback on your essay labled "issue"
The body paragraphs of this essay are well constructed and reasoned. If you had more time you could have elaborated on your third body paragraph. The introduction of this seems a little stiff and improving its flow to match the rest of the essay may yield a higher score. overall I would probably give this essay a 5.
Hope that helps
The body paragraphs of this essay are well constructed and reasoned. If you had more time you could have elaborated on your third body paragraph. The introduction of this seems a little stiff and improving its flow to match the rest of the essay may yield a higher score. overall I would probably give this essay a 5.
Hope that helps